Sarah: okay, i've found numerous annoyances to this story, and here they are:
first off: chapters are TOO DAMNED SHORT!
secondly, you REALLY need to work on your spelling and grammer.
third, you haven't updated in eons.
fourth, you really need to make points in each chapter and center MUCH LONGER chapters around said points.
fifth: your chapters have no obvious points
sixth: ya need to put in descriptions, despite the fact that everyone knows what the folk look like
seventh: how the HELL did Sesshou and Kagome meet in harvard?

there are so many other points i could go on and on for a LONG time and still not be done, but these are the major points. if you can fix these major points, then you will have it pretty much made, kiddo.