ahhhh! i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

and myouga is a flea demon. not a fly :] keep writing! your great at it!

love it! a little confusing but other than that i love it.

what the hell is wrong with her?...what made her hate them so much?...more chapets please!!!!

I went to your site PLEASE MAKE MORE!!!!!! Yer an excellent writer*-*
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I dunno. I'm bored. Whoopee...she's a demon. Big fuckign wow with the way she's been acting. I find it cruel o fher to betray her friend and Inuyasha. Why can't they just leave the group alone at least, why does she have to betray her friends? There is no drama, just a sense of soemthing off beat. Or someone singing off key. Whatever, I just don't like it. This does not mean that you are a bad writer. In fact you're just fine. But the plot offends. It could be my morals or sense of righteousness but Kagome's behavior makes me sick. BUT TO ALL PEOPLE WHO LIKE A WICKED PLOT: DO READ YOU'LL LIKE IT!!!

I dunno. I'm bored. Whoopee...she's a demon. Big fuckign wow with the way she's been acting. I find it cruel o fher to betray her friend and Inuyasha. Why can't they just leave the group alone at least, why does she have to betray her friends? There is no drama, just a sense of soemthing off beat. Or someone singing off key. Whatever, I just don't like it. This does not mean that you are a bad writer. In fact you're just fine. But the plot offends. It could be my morals or sense of righteousness but Kagome's behavior makes me sick. BUT TO ALL PEOPLE WHO LIKE A WICKED PLOT: DO READ YOU'LL LIKE IT!!!

I couldn't get through the first chapter. Maybe if you went back and reposted it with paragraphs instead of one long one? I don't know if you know this, but every time someone speaks in writing, it starts a new paragraph (that might help with separating it into paragraphs). That way, it becomes easier to keep track of what's going on in the fanfic. Hope you take this kindly, it is only advice.