im going under the assumption that u did not beta this because there were some major spelling mistakes and grammatical mistakes goin on. however the story wasnt too bad but the spelling issues made it really hard to read. i just wanted to let you know and wanted to know if you would like me to beta for yah. let me know if you do

its really good
different and intresting but, although it is goog there are spelling mistakes that is the only thing wrong so please update soon and correct chapter 1

this is freaken awsome!!!....more chapters please!!

I like the idea of this story but you REALLY need to have someone check your story before you post it. People lose interest if they can't understand.

And also, you REALLY need to look into paragraphing. You have like seven paragraphs jammed together and it makes the story kind of hard to read. If you don't want to lose your readers than I sugest you get someone to make your fic understandable and readable.

I'm not trying to criticize you but these are somethings you really should do.

~Kimonno Rose

Nice story but you need to fix your spelling because its kind of confusing and you need to watch your grammer when you try to extend the plot between Sessho and Kagome . Overall it a nice story just need to check on your spelling and grammar !! Sorry if i sound ruff but thats one of my pet peeve when it comes to fanfiction is grammar and Miss Spelling

i highly suggest that you ask someone read your story before you start posting on here. Dont get discourage with my review just look as an suggestion to improve you work .

take care
Sommerstar8o8

it is good and i would really like to read more. its very interesting.