I like this story a lot but the last few chapters get sloppy. The conversations are all smooshed together instead of having a line for themselves. Maybe a little of editing is in order? For example, the last chapter seems its made of 3 big paragraphs when I know the conversations are just squashed into them. I really do love this story though!

This is interesting! Keep up the good work. I will be looking forward to reading your next chapter...So please update soon!