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I loved this! it was soo good! I love how you Gave Kagome's beast a umm I guess soft side for her human master, in the part where she reminds Kagome that she gave InYasha options, a chance to live.
Much more detailed, I really liked this much better, and Yasha's last words? Out of all the things he could have said, I think this was one of the best, the only thing that may have held a challenge to it may have been 'Forgive me' but even so... WOW.
I can't wait to see how the rest of the tachi pack responds to Inu's death. OH! and Sesshomaru is coming! I'm so excited! Will Kagome challenge him? will they fight? I'm just bursting with excitement!
I appreciate that you took my words to heart. I can't wait to see what you come up with next!
Mizui (Chapter 4) - Sun 05 Aug 2012
I feel like this was all very abrupt, there was no detail of how Kagome came to hear InuYasha, or about their fight, his death, or even her transformation. Does she just slip between forms between one step and the next? Does her beast form only have the animal and not a humanoid shape? if so how does her beast speak? You said she killed Yash, but how? Didn't he put up any sort of fight? Was Kagome hurt?
I'm sure I'm not the only one wondering these things. I have loved your story up until this point, but this chapter lacks detail and feels really rushed.
I did like how you reasoned out Kagome's reaction to Sango in the last chapter.
Anyway I am looking foward to the next chapter
Wow! That was...unexpected and kinda sad. Poor Kagome!
Mizui (Chapter 3) - Sat 04 Aug 2012
Oh my goodness!! I'm laughing so hard about Sesshoumaru! So cute!!
I really like how you've explained demons and their beasts! So cool!
I cant wait to see what you have for us next!
Mizui (Chapter 2) - Sat 04 Aug 2012
Wow! I can't believe I was so distracted that you managed to post two chapters without me noticing!
I really liked this chapter, it was a lot of fun to read and I can't wait to see the kind of personality you give Kirara.
and, I'm still excited to read about Kagome as a demon! I love stories where she gets to be a demon!! ^^
Oh boy! Sango was almost cat chow! I can't wait to see what happens next!
hmm, so you picked a tora (tiger), are you sticking the actual japanse subspicies or going for the more commonly know bangal?. The only Japanes species of feline are decendents of the Asian Lepord Cat, which would make such a interesting tale. The Iriomote Cat and the Tshushima Cat, (the true japanese felines) have the marking you described. There was a blue tiger or slate-coloured tiger, the Maltese tiger mostly found in Southern China. Some were documented to have been transported over to Japan and bred into the subspecies. *_0 sorry, I have a thing for cats and culture and found it so interesting that Japan only has two species of felines and for the rest of the world is soo diverse.
Loved the reactions from each speaking member of the tachi. Especially Inu, so childish. I don't think Shippo should be a problem since just about all felines adopt orphans of one type or another. :)
But you forgot one Kilala, love to know her reaction. Funny she would be the elder and possible teacher to the Kagome. Oh, the halarity on that. All cats are sooo aloof and dog boy would be raging mad for every little thing.
oh!! she might become better climbing a tree than dog boy!! ahahah
Hope to see an update soon!!
Mizui (Chapter 1) - Wed 01 Aug 2012
a tiger! ooh!! how cool. haha I'm excited to see what happens next!
Sounds like a promising story. I can't wait to see what happens!
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