I love your story and ya while the sentence structure is a bit weird its not too distracting. I really would love it if you could update soon. XD Keep up the good work!
like nobody likes this story before and was only lei to Chapter 3 if not more memory from there, and been waiting for the update jijij your story is good, and if you have spelling or grammatical problem, no matter what it solves over time, much reading and vastante practice, but creativity is a gift and you do not practice prefecionarlo if you lose, so keep your talent (predonated my lack of spelling and grammatical errors but I do not like English very much and am dixlecica jijij)
KitElizaKing (Chapter 4) - Fri 04 Nov 2011
An interesting story, but a little disjointed. It could flow a little more smoothly with a bit of judicious editing. I am enjoying reading it though, it certainly has an inspired beginning.
Koi (Chapter 4) - Fri 04 Nov 2011
This is really good. I can't wait for the next update!
LISAAAAAAAAAAa (Chapter 3) - Fri 04 Nov 2011
THIS IS COOL! It's really well done. =] WOO!
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