Okay, I'm confused. Does Sesshomaru have only 1 arm, or 2?? In this part, "Another wave of pain choked the whisper in her throat, and giving up, she gazed at him, waveringly, as he pressed closer, fingers of his other hand raising, glimmering crimson with what she recognised with a start to be his own blood. His fingers rested barely against her cheek, their warmth radiating against her cheek as his head slanted to the side, brushing softly to the side, his words spoken directly into her ear", you write that he has 2 hands. His other hand is gripping her wrist. But, earlier in the chapter, you write, "Her eyes flickered to the ripped and empty sleeve". And, I noticed in the next chapter, you refer to both his hands. So, how can he have an empty sleeve?? Just thought I'd mention that. Otherwise, I'm enjoying your story. :D
Great story, I hope you don't take long to update the next chapters. Keep it coming.
That is one intence chapter....
headalphafemale (Chapter 3) - Sun 22 Jan 2012
I like your story, and I like how you have written it. But in the third chapter I am lost and can't figure out what is happening with Inuyasha, Sango,and Monk. It's very confusing to me. Is the dragon dead or alive? Is Inuyasha inside the cave, calling for Kagome? Is this a collapse of the cave because of the dragon, the battle with it? Or just an earthquake? I only again begin to understand when Sesshomaru pulls Kagome into his body, when things collapse. Please continue your interesting story. Thank You!
hm this is interesting so far! i look forward to finding out what happens next! :)
Hmm, hmm, hmm... intriguing...
Off to a very nice start, I must say. Can't wait for more.
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