My one critisism is that this story seems a bit disjointed. There's some scenes that don't make a whole lot of sense, or really develop the story. I'd watch that a bit, and maybe get a proof reader or some one to give you that feedback ahead of time.
Aw! ^_^ He said 'please'! ^_^
Thanks for writing!
Lillian (Chapter 14) - Sun 14 Aug 2011
Pftt. *snort giggle* Ha. Hahahaha. Ha. "...lip curling as she moved with exaggerated horror to cover herself, tone clipping around his response." I can see it now! All affronted. "You liken this Sesshomaru to a wolf? DIE NINGEN!"
*u*
Lillian (Chapter 9) - Sun 14 Aug 2011
Ah hahahahahhah! He gets a taste of his own treatment! Yes he does. Whatcha gonna do now, Sesshomaru? Huh? Huhhhh? Bring it on.
Lillian (Chapter 8) - Sun 14 Aug 2011
I love that song! I love that song! I love this story! I love that song.
Have I mentioned I love that song? :3
Meara (Chapter 14) - Thu 11 Aug 2011
I'm really liking this fic, very cheeky. ;-) Please do continue, can't wait for another update!
Jenna (Chapter 11) - Tue 09 Aug 2011
I like this idea, but I must say the the dragon comment kinda confused me. Was Sesshomaru already on the island, or was he stranded too? Just a couple questions that popped into my mind. Otherwise I think you have a good thing going here!
trianastyx (Chapter 10) - Mon 08 Aug 2011
I love Kagome's almost evil enjoyment in bothering the ever difficult and enigmatic Sesshomaru! I love the romance of these two and their hilarious and witty bantering! :D
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