An intriguing story. I always enjoy this plot device (Sesshomaru's beast falls for the miko before he does) so it's good to come across another wonderful version.
I like the interaction between Sesshomaru and Kagome; how she's still wary of him and treats him with respect. Sesshomaru still is not sure what to make of the female who traveled with his half-brother and is resistant to his inner youkai's prodding.
I look foward to seeing how things fair for Kagome as she stays in Sesshomaru's home. Will she continue to be treated poorly? I was so glad to see her inner strength show and hope that she continues to stand up for herself.
I see that Kagome finally noticed Sesshomaru as a fine male he is *lol at the understatement*.
Sesshomaru in the other hand, is being more difficult, but that's the way he is, I suppose, so I like this reaction coming from him. I don't expect her to suddenly fall in love with a human, esp Kagome. Interested, intrigued, yes, but smitten... I can't imagine it.
You did a great job on portraying these two. Well done!! :)
A good start. I know this plot is used so many times, it depends on how the authors would execute it. I'm interested on how the Yokai viewed Kagome as his chosen mate, while Sesshomaru, though he has yet to agree, is tolerant to Kagome. It feels as if he was almost resigned with the choice of his mate. LOL.
On the other hand, I thought at first that Kagome is too quick on accepting her current situation, so when Sesshomaru began investigating her about Inuyasha and her reaction to it, I am relieved that she still have a hard time about the matter. Sooner or later, though, she must dwell on it more thoroughly and let the hurt in her heart healed completely.
Anyway, I'm going to read the next.
*blush* Again with Sesshomaru's beast. My goodness, you are going to give me a nosebleed. I was definitely angered when the female demons reacted so rudely towards Kagome. *screams: Why is everyone being so mean to Kagome and bullying her!?*
*sobs*
But the way Sesshomaru saved her there was like a prince-charming move. Never thought Sesshomaru could behavior like a gentlemen towards women....but then again....why wouldn't he to the woman he respects? Hm, you had me thinking there. There are stories that portray Sesshomaru as a violent person or agressive, but here it seems quite different. I believe everyone creates their own portrayal of Sesshomaru's character in a unique way. And I have to say, your Sesshomaru intrigues me.
Anyways, well done and I hope you continue on with the story.
*chuckles* Oh, Kagome's hatred for Kikyo doesn't surprise me, but calling Kikyo a 'Kinky-hoe' does! I am saddened that Inuyasha has to be such a jerk in this story, and really glad that Sesshomaru's personality is portrayed nicely. I found the 'Yokai' beast of Sesshomaru very loving and caring, which made me blush when imagining Sesshomaru acting that way (even though it is his beast).
The first chapter definitely lays out all the information necessary and draws readers in to read the next chapter. I hope you keep up the good work. Even though you mentioned the plot is very common with many other fanfictions, there are plenty of twist and turns you can add to give this story your own unique path. I can't wait to see what you have in store with this story.
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