That was sad. I'm glad I read it, though. I think you could improve by working on meshing the story together a little more, though. Blending the scenes into one another more clearly and working on a little description, but otherwise it's good.
  Thank you for the read.
  ~ Incomprehensible 
      
LC Rose (Chapter 2) -  Thu 08 Jan 2009 
| How freakin' sad, but beautifully done!!
       
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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