I like where you went. It's a good start for a chapter story - strong.

I noticed a few intervals where you could have substituted some words for others and rephrased, but overall it was a good piece. I really like some of the descriptions in this chapter, and I'll definitely keep a lookout for the next.

Thanks for the read.

~ Incomprehensible

Definitely an interesting start. I wonder why Sesshoumaru bothered to save her. What's in it for him? :P