A very nice beginning. Decently written and I think it would make an great chapter story. I hope you continue.
From the setup, I'm guessing this is a reincarnation story. While I am not a fan of reincarnation stories, I will say your story is very well written and develop, I really like the beginning setup. It definitely leaves more to be desired. I hope you aren't done with this and plan to update soon, I really would like to see where you go with this.
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