Very well done, such an isight into sesshoumaru and the description of how he feel about her is how i always pictured it! Great job!
interesting, is this canon or AU?
Gotta say I agree with Lady Scheherazadea on this one. The present tense seemed to disrupt the flow of the story and made it rather difficult to follow along. And even though it was a drabble, which only allows for so many words, I think a bit more of an explanation or detail would go a long way to helping this story.
Charly Dan, Charly Dan, Charly Dan! Hi!Apparently the red ruby slippers aren't working, so I'll just leave a message and hope you'll get back to me later. ;DI love this. I really do. I love the formatting - not a lot of people use present tense for oneshots anymore, and if they do, most times it doesn't work. I'm glad you did this - it's nice, it's short, it's simple, and most of all, it's clean. I'm glad I read it - I really enjoyed it.
The tense you wrote in was very awkward, well at least that's how I felt reading it. If you changed it to past tense, I think it would improve the story greatly. Other than that, not bad at all.
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