I like your story. It was written well and the lemon scene, in the end, was good. Oh, but instead of "penis," "manhood" might have been a better fit for Kagome's use in that particular sentence.
I enjoyed reading this one shot. It was very nicely written.
It felt some what rushed and pretty much like a fairytale as I supposed as some fairytales go but I liked it just the same.
The lemon scene I thought, was nicely done and a bit erotic.
It ended too soon...wishing that there was more to come but it ended as a 'happily ever after' and that was nice. :)
Great job!!!
Welcome to Dokuga!!!